i've decided that though those are my thoughts today, the last post is not one upon which i want thoughts to dwell, so this is something else that i was working on yesterday. i think that i would like it as a song. actually, i just like the idea itself, which is the case with most anything that comes from my fingers; or my lips. no title yet, and it's pretty rough, but enjoy:
beginning of the year,
looking to keep track,
i bought a picture-a-day for my desk
time flips by, goin' all too fast
somehow the future became the past
through spring and summer, then into fall,
my picture-a-day holds it all
(flipping through the pages of time)
april, june, july, september,
30 days throughout november
but i didn't get past the twelveth.
perhaps i'll stay in my pretty picture
and watch the world go by
in my perpetual mid-november, holding onto this moment of mine.
go on life, come back for me later
i'm taking this day that i rightfully payed for
what's the use in flipping through time?
i'm holding onto this moment of mine.
april, june, july, september,
30 days throughout november
but i didn't get past the twelveth.
perhaps i'll stay in my pretty picture
and watch the world go by
in my perpetual mid-november, holding onto this moment of mine.
don't move the page, i'm likin' this twelveth
i'll stay here a while, in fall
Saturday, November 25, 2006
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I like it. Like you said, a little rough, but the idea and the basic rhythm is there. I really like it, especially with my birthday coming up too.
thanks. any advice for change?
"go on life, come back for me later
i'm taking this day that i rightfully payed for"
Italicized part is rough. Some of the transitions don't fit the same rhythm. It would help if I could hear the beat you wrote it to, or want it written to.
yeah,i think it would help if i knew that.
i always like your poetry.. i lost the rhythm for a moment but for the most part it flows well. way to be.
thanks! where does the rhythm change?
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